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    dots Submission Name: Strangers to Ourselvesdots

    Author: Soulraven
    ASL Info:    31/Male/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 510/481/142
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 922
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    dotsStrangers to Ourselvesdots

    Searching for salvation.
    The sun begins to eclipse.
    All trapped in damnation.
    Prepare for social apocalypse.
    Society's crumbling Empire.
    We are blind to structures error.
    Every man's soul is lit on fire.
    Left with un-wielding terror.
    Let the innocent children sleep.
    While listening to my praise.
    Protect them from corruption we seek.
    I pray for the end of avarice days.
    Our future they stole.
    They kill with no repent.
    Our life they control.
    This ruthless government.
    Only hidden grief
    No one finds relief.
    Here is the abyss.
    To which everyone is a witness.
    Who's blazing a path with me?
    Leave corporate America
    To its evil vice.
    Most believe
    I speak blasphemy.
    I think it's time
    To control our own Life.
    Our unbeheld God
    Wasn't born in a manger,
    Savior's Ourselves,
    To whom we are a stranger.

    Submitted on 2004-02-11 17:44:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "Saviours ourselves to whom we are a stranger". Love the statement. Uniquely phrased. Even though I have a different view point, I think the lyrics express the thought quite well. It would be interesting to hear the music to complete the picture.
    | Posted on 2004-02-11 00:00:00 | by kblyric | [ Reply to This ]
      nice work... can't wait to hear this on the # 1 spot!.... and don't tell urself it won't b... it will.. nice work!!!
    | Posted on 2004-02-11 00:00:00 | by drkpoet | [ Reply to This ]

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