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    dots Submission Name: Why It Hurt'sdots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 396
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsWhy It Hurt'sdots
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    It's his eyes of vengeance
    It's his tongue of knives
    His cold shoulder lack of patience
    And his bed of lies

    It's his shrug of denial
    It's his smile of glass
    His shudder of epiphany
    And his heart of brass

    It's his ideal of better
    It's his futile race
    His lack of compromise
    And his worn out pace

    It's his soul of lonesome
    It's his thought reform
    His stark rejection
    And his heartache storm

    It's her place of faithless
    It's her "came and went" stain
    Her "love forever" lies
    And his reaction was pain




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