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    dots Submission Name: Sleight Of Handdots
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    Author: moaxcym
    ASL Info:    23/m/Pakistan
    Elite Ratio:    2.87 - 155/196/85
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsSleight Of Handdots
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    The distance between God's left and right hand
    Is a billions light years of yearning, grief,
    And a solitary moment of love.

    Burn down the firmaments that adorn the west.
    Bury in ashes the sun of the east.
    He, who travels a million light years
    Can dance with the moon an eternal waltz
    But damned is he, who could tell
    between love and a sleight of hand.




    Submitted on 2009-09-16 02:44:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      perhaps His hands
    span a billion suns
    still, the weight of a universe
    lies with us

    whose hearts are as huge
    as hollow stars
    immense and hungry
    like the jaws of war...

    Just a few more thoughts on yours.
    | Posted on 2015-12-15 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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