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    dots Submission Name: I Will Not Burn Bridges dots
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    Author: Sheakhan
    ASL Info:    22/M/FL
    Elite Ratio:    5.66 - 167/183/82
    Words: 247
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 63
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1465



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       Because putting aside what you desire most is sometimes the only way, the best way to preserve what you care for beyond your own wants.

    It's a shame this won't be read... It's the only thing I've said, even if it's arbitrary like this, that isn't lacking.


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    I don't need your love in order to feel my heart,
    I can find my peace of mind in any flickering star.
    I don't need that feeling, in order to feel free
    I can find my comfort in the boundless thundering sea.

    It's not that I don't want it, or hope your mind will change,
    but I don't need you as a lover to live up to my full range.
    I'm hardly at my greatest, knowing I may not be in your dreams,
    but living without your affection is not outside my means.

    I won't go so far as to say that I don't have desires,
    but I will not burn bridges with those fires.

    I can smile without your whispers waking me each day,
    and I can dwell on other things, than you pushing me away.
    I can carry onward smiling, with your burden on my back,
    albiet slightly less enthusiastic, lacking that.

    It's not like there's no pining, in the deep part of my brain
    but I don't need a lover with the tranquil hum of rain.
    I can enjoy the sunlight without you to guide me there
    and even if with effort, I can still admire and stare.

    I won't go so far as to say that I don't have desires,
    but I will not burn bridges with those fires.

    Yea, I will not burn bridges with those fires.

    Love, I won't burn our bridges with desires.




    Submitted on 2009-09-16 03:33:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Keeg, this is really good.

    It's open and honest, sad but optimistic...a realistic look at the changing of relationships, and what it takes to keep something important in your life. Sacrificing.

    Great refrain too.

    If you ever put this to music, I would like to hear it.

    james
    | Posted on 2009-09-30 00:00:00 | by FallenGrace | [ Reply to This ]
      this one you can make a song out of, i would listen. and possibly help you make up music for it.

    anyways, i love this one. that's all i have to say about it. it's my favorite piece of mine that you have written in a while.

    it's genious, it's true, and i fully understand and agree.
    | Posted on 2009-09-19 00:00:00 | by autumnflame | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow Keegan, this is something that I wish everyone could feel at one point in their life. To get to such a mature level with an understanding that life does go on and even though the simple pleasures out there aren't even close to being compared with what someone had before, it's nice to know that you can still find them.

    Hmm I think I stopped making sense at some point along the way, but I'm trying my best here.

    This poem of itself without the history attached to it, is well...beautiful. I hate seeing those poems that dwell on the loss, and how they refuse to branch out from their pain and see the true poetic side to it, instead they sit in the dark and think of how they would die without someone's love, that they need someone to be worth something. That thought alone destroyed many good people cause they refuse to leave those who hurt them the most, all because they're afraid to be alone or to be without that connection. It's sick really, having spent most my life watching the degrading affects that has on someone and their soul.

    This is a brilliant piece. Something from the heart that can quicken anyone Else's pulse with the beauty and the sadness that lingers behind every word. I probably am far off the mark in most that I have said...but wow.

    Thank you for showing me this. It's been a pleasure to read.

    ~Nikki
    | Posted on 2009-09-16 00:00:00 | by nikita2u | [ Reply to This ]


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