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    dots Submission Name: wayward morningsdots
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    Author: Jimi James
    ASL Info:    24/m/somehwere
    Elite Ratio:    6.16 - 90/78/41
    Words: 37
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 632
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 258



    Description:
       cafard.
    has something to do with "dear fell wake"


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    dotswayward morningsdots
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    The steep stairs,
    that lead to dawn;
    the hue of a new days dorm
    forces to focus.

    The muttered monarch
    that once throned so loud;
    the constant swinging in the clouds
    persecutes the past.





    Submitted on 2009-09-16 11:53:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I am not really too sure of what you meant in this piece, although it was beautiful i cannot grasp the meaning completely. Maybe this was just a bit too abstract for me to interpret, still i enjoyed it and it had a special feel to it. What inspired you to write this?
    | Posted on 2009-09-26 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm not quite shure what to make of this. A lot could be related to each individual image, but to that end I wonder if I wouldn't be bringing my own meaning to your words. For example, there seems to be a scheme, but given that the piece is so small I wonder if it is not just a coincidental correlation.

    I can also not help but notice your obsession with mornings, awakening... Why is this? Does it symbolize something for you..? Are you pulling it from some unheard of post-modernist philosophy?

    It might also be a deed to put the two that relate together...
    | Posted on 2009-09-23 00:00:00 | by Outlaw | [ Reply to This ]


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