wayward mornings

Author: Jimi James ASL Info:    24/m/somehwere Elite Ratio:    6.16 - 90 /78 /41 Words: 37

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wayward mornings

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The steep stairs, that lead to dawn; the hue of a new days dorm forces to focus. The muttered monarch that once throned so loud; the constant swinging in the clouds persecutes the past.

Submitted on 2009-09-16 11:53:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I am not really too sure of what you meant in this piece, although it was beautiful i cannot grasp the meaning completely. Maybe this was just a bit too abstract for me to interpret, still i enjoyed it and it had a special feel to it. What inspired you to write this?

| Posted on 2009-09-26 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]

I'm not quite shure what to make of this. A lot could be related to each individual image, but to that end I wonder if I wouldn't be bringing my own meaning to your words. For example, there seems to be a scheme, but given that the piece is so small I wonder if it is not just a coincidental correlation. I can also not help but notice your obsession with mornings, awakening... Why is this? Does it symbolize something for you..? Are you pulling it from some unheard of post-modernist philosophy? It might also be a deed to put the two that relate together...

| Posted on 2009-09-23 00:00:00 | by Outlaw | [ Reply to This ]

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