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    dots Submission Name: Over Idots
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    Author: Aangskate
    ASL Info:    18/male
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 133/117/44
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsOver Idots
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    ďGot to move foreward.Ē
    You say.

    ďIíve made so may mistakes.Ē
    Was one of them me?

    Itís over, itís done with-
    But why does my heart not feel it?

    I wake up each morning,
    My illusions disappear.

    It wasnít just a bad dream,
    Reality is my nightmare.

    Donít say it, Canít say it
    Whispers, ďAlone.Ē

    My body shakes uncontrollably,
    I can hardly contain my tears.

    Insides are twisting,
    The Anger keeps building.

    Just face it,
    Iím still in love with you




    Submitted on 2009-09-16 13:12:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I was intruiged by this because the stanzas seem to be split into two voices--that of the heart, and that of the head. And I enjoyed the overall feeling that piece gave me. Even though I felt the end was a little clichť, that didn't take away from me impression of the words because they all fit very neatly together. Maybe be more explanatory, it is hard to understand exactly what this poem is about, but I do like how you say what you do.

    Good job!
    | Posted on 2009-09-17 00:00:00 | by Anneboleyn707 | [ Reply to This ]


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