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Over II

Author: Aangskate
ASL Info:    18/male
Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 133 /117 /44
Words: 99
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Over II

Insides churned
Cheeks reddened
Now the only symptom left is heartache.

I said Goodbye,
Then walked away,
Head held High.

You watched me as I left,
For the last time.
All traces of a smile washed from your face

You couldn’t see my expression,
Mirroring the breaking of another piece.
A piece of my battered heart.

My fists were clenched
I felt like falling
But you just saw me walk away.

That look-
Sad, alone, Regretting?
Is burned into my memory.

My insides churned.
My cheeks burned.
My heart aches

Submitted on 2009-09-16 13:13:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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