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    dots Submission Name: Over IIdots
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    Author: Aangskate
    ASL Info:    18/male
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 133/117/44
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsOver IIdots
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    Insides churned
    Cheeks reddened
    Now the only symptom left is heartache.

    I said Goodbye,
    Then walked away,
    Head held High.

    You watched me as I left,
    For the last time.
    All traces of a smile washed from your face

    You couldn’t see my expression,
    Mirroring the breaking of another piece.
    A piece of my battered heart.

    My fists were clenched
    I felt like falling
    But you just saw me walk away.

    That look-
    Sad, alone, Regretting?
    Is burned into my memory.

    My insides churned.
    My cheeks burned.
    My heart aches




    Submitted on 2009-09-16 13:13:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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