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Over III


Author: Aangskate
ASL Info:    18/male
Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 133 /117 /44
Words: 62
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Taken from a longer version that I didn't like- so everything doesn't quite fit together...but I liked these lines as much as they can be liked


Over III


I’ve lost what I can never lose,
Found what I never wanted to find.

My soul suffers the losses,
My findings sear through my heart.

Pain
Pain
Pain

It became unavoidable,
You must have thought,
As you tore away another strand.

The warmth is gone
The memories forever remain.

Dear Heart,
Be strong for me.




Submitted on 2009-09-16 13:17:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like each of these more than the last, and they hurt me deeply, as i imagine you were hurt as you wrote them.

I am sorry to have caused you so much pain, and hope that some day you may come to forgive me.

Regretfully yours,
Chandler
| Posted on 2009-10-20 00:00:00 | by dthforeverpain8 | [ Reply to This ]


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