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    dots Submission Name: Over IIIdots
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    Author: Aangskate
    ASL Info:    18/male
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 133/117/44
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 668
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 442



    Description:
       Taken from a longer version that I didn't like- so everything doesn't quite fit together...but I liked these lines as much as they can be liked


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    dotsOver IIIdots
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    Iíve lost what I can never lose,
    Found what I never wanted to find.

    My soul suffers the losses,
    My findings sear through my heart.

    Pain
    Pain
    Pain

    It became unavoidable,
    You must have thought,
    As you tore away another strand.

    The warmth is gone
    The memories forever remain.

    Dear Heart,
    Be strong for me.




    Submitted on 2009-09-16 13:17:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like each of these more than the last, and they hurt me deeply, as i imagine you were hurt as you wrote them.

    I am sorry to have caused you so much pain, and hope that some day you may come to forgive me.

    Regretfully yours,
    Chandler
    | Posted on 2009-10-20 00:00:00 | by dthforeverpain8 | [ Reply to This ]


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