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    dots Submission Name: I Always Knewdots
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    Author: Demon__666
    ASL Info:    20/f/Oklahoma
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 312/359/124
    Words: 195
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsI Always Knewdots
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    What does she have that I donít?
    What does she do that I wonít?
    What does she say that I canít?
    What do i have to do to hear you say "i love you"?
    To catch your attention again,
    For you to spend your time with me,


    What did I do for you to want to hurt me?
    Why wonít you tell me about her, I know she exists.
    Why do you love her now?
    Do you know that I STILL LOVE YOU?
    Will you ever tell me we are over?
    That you go somewhere else to get your kicks,

    I tried to be my best,
    To give you everything you want.
    Acted like nothing was ever wrong,
    Dismissed all of your lies,
    But i always knew deep inside,
    She had always won.
    I was never the one.

    As my heart grows numb,
    And you still treated me like i was dumb.
    I exposed you.
    And over my veins drew,
    A map direct to my heart.
    And always knew from the start,
    Your everything was a lie.
    I am telling you tonight,
    Everything i am and we are dies tonight.




    Submitted on 2009-09-16 14:41:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm guessing you had a tough relationship? I'm sorry. This poem deffinately came from the heart and a little bit of anger. Very emotional.
    | Posted on 2009-09-17 00:00:00 | by extrEMO | [ Reply to This ]


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