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    dots Submission Name: Youíre Truth In A Brighter Lightdots

    Author: Demon__666
    ASL Info:    20/f/Oklahoma
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 312/359/124
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsYouíre Truth In A Brighter Lightdots

    You say you love me and donít want to leave
    I tell you it hurts but you will ever see
    So my question still remains unanswered
    I tried so hard to show you
    But could not force you to feel
    We talked before but you died first
    You left me to guess, to clean up our mess
    You say i showed you no reason to care,
    You say i showed you no love and this is why you need her, but will she ever make you happy?
    I never felt you did a thing,
    You never showed that you tried for me.
    How can i know how you feel when i ask you never speak.
    As for those suspicions in my head you know the ones we threw on your bed,
    Those have been there many a time before.
    I tried so hard to save your life but my wings never span when I set out that night.
    As for deaths beautiful hymn itís just my sobs of love for him.

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