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white dust

Author: SilentDreams42
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Words: 31
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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it will probably mean different things to different people


white dust

white dust,

grab it and rip it to shreds
shatter it to pieces
until it is no more

I beg you-
steal my you soul,
you bastard

Submitted on 2009-09-16 17:49:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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