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    dots Submission Name: Break Medots

    Author: SilentDreams42
    Elite Ratio:    6.43 - 38/30/42
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    high expectations lead only to self destruction

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    dotsBreak Medots

    wait for me
    as this Ungodly journey presses on
    as life itself leaves the realms of reality

    find me
    for I am lost within myself
    I am lost deep within my own confusion
    trapped in this hell I call my mind

    help me escape
    for hell is a horrid place to be
    its eating me alive
    preying on my fleshy past

    save me
    the whispers never cease
    craving a single drop of blood
    craving just a hint of pain

    but now my time is up
    and I find that you were never real
    as my heart stops beating

    I now have but one feeling deep within my soul...


    Submitted on 2009-09-16 18:03:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Thanks! It was a really good poem that seemed to really describe a feeling of desperation I sometimes feel within me! It was good because it never lost its flow, you allowed the reader to follow you from stanza to stanza. Sometimes that can be a hard thing to do!

    I sometimes wonder if in the end when nothing really matters if the only thing ill feel is regret. The regret of knowing that i didn't try hard enough, the regreat of knowing that i didn't really accomplish much. Im a procrastinator and the source of my procrastination is my fear of trying and failing.

    but anyways good write, it was a pleasure to read.
    | Posted on 2009-09-28 00:00:00 | by Katrinagolden | [ Reply to This ]

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