Break Me

Author: SilentDreams42 Elite Ratio:    6.43 - 38 /30 /42 Words: 117

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Break Me

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wait for me as this Ungodly journey presses on as life itself leaves the realms of reality find me for I am lost within myself I am lost deep within my own confusion trapped in this hell I call my mind help me escape for hell is a horrid place to be its eating me alive preying on my fleshy past save me the whispers never cease craving a single drop of blood craving just a hint of pain but now my time is up and I find that you were never real as my heart stops beating I now have but one feeling deep within my soul... regret.

Submitted on 2009-09-16 18:03:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Thanks! It was a really good poem that seemed to really describe a feeling of desperation I sometimes feel within me! It was good because it never lost its flow, you allowed the reader to follow you from stanza to stanza. Sometimes that can be a hard thing to do! I sometimes wonder if in the end when nothing really matters if the only thing ill feel is regret. The regret of knowing that i didn't try hard enough, the regreat of knowing that i didn't really accomplish much. Im a procrastinator and the source of my procrastination is my fear of trying and failing. but anyways good write, it was a pleasure to read.

| Posted on 2009-09-28 00:00:00 | by Katrinagolden | [ Reply to This ]

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