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    dots Submission Name: Begging dots
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    Author: Kaygrl
    ASL Info:    19/female/Washington
    Elite Ratio:    2.31 - 153/196/213
    Words: 144
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    … And I wake from these dreams with tears on my face,
    Begging God please,
    Please I don’t want to hurt any more,
    Just take away my pain, take away the scars,
    Heal me Lord and make me whole again.
    Run through my soul and cleanse me…
    Just make it go away.
    Just make it go away…

    I wipe away my tears and start my day,
    With you on my mind wondering if it’s really worth it.
    How many times do I have to prove that I am strong before it stops?
    How many times need I beg for mercy?
    I can’t even escape in dreams,
    And it hurts when I wake up,
    It hurts when I breathe.
    Please make it stop.
    Just make it stop…





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      i cant even begin to explain the imagry that ran through my mind as i read this.. the nights i wake up with tears and the ache in my heart.
    imagining what could have been. how he put me through so many trials, and was so ungrateful..he made me cry..broke my heart..used me..and yet i still wanted him back..still missed him..still loved him...and till this day ive been on a upsidedown rollercoaster ride with this fool..wondering if its worth the tears...worth the drama..getting kicked out of my house..and this recent situation..was the last i could handle.. its not worth the longing and the heart ache..waiting for someone to change when they dont want to. hopes and wishes arent enough (<--one of my pieces)..

    people learn through experiances and sooner or later you'll be tired of the longing and heart ache..and i hope it wont be as hard on u as it was me.
    | Posted on 2009-09-18 00:00:00 | by FadedSilence | [ Reply to This ]


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