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Dancing


Author: Emerging Soul
ASL Info:    48/VERY female/Wisconsin
Elite Ratio:    4.36 - 1240 /1114 /244
Words: 133
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Just whimsical thoughts


Dancing



One day while working in my garden
I looked up to the sound of footsteps
Coming toward me across the lawn
But could see nothing.

Bent once more to my task
I became aware of the sound
Of giggles and laughter hushed into a whisper
The patter of tiny feet
Brushing effortlessly upon the grass
Rustling gently with the wind

I saw them then
There were two of them
Chasing each other around
In playful bursts of energy
As the breeze blew them from place to place

Dressed in green and brown
Their arms slightly yellowed from the frost
They tumbled merrily about in their game
As though all spring and summer
They had been held captive on their tree
And now they were free

The leaves were dancing




Submitted on 2004-07-20 08:46:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Hey, I love plant personification. Although I have to admit that I guessed it was leaves before you said it. that's fine though. This is a good write.
| Posted on 2004-07-21 00:00:00 | by Black Rock Tractor | [ Reply to This ]
  reminds me of my favirite scene in "AMerican Beauty" when he says "Do you want to see the most beatiful thing I ever filmed?" and the film rolled as a plastic bags wafted in the breeze...dancing to it's own song...nicely written, yet again...i do enjoy your work immensely
| Posted on 2004-07-20 00:00:00 | by Kristina9178 | [ Reply to This ]
  i love how you brought life to the leaves...autumn is a beautiful season...and you've captured it wonderfully...i love the line" giggles and laughter hushed into a whisper"...i had an image in my head of two leaves twirling with the breeze while reading this...smiles ange
| Posted on 2004-07-20 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]
  i like this one. you've done a pretty good job here describing the leaves. ny only nit is the part about footsteps--it somehow doesn't seem to jibe with the rest of the poem. dunno whay that bothers me. anyway, feel free to take my comments or leave 'em. :-)
| Posted on 2004-07-20 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
  I love the use of movement imbuing the poem with the life and beauty of nature. I was able to imagine the scene because the description was well written.
| Posted on 2004-07-20 00:00:00 | by Bloomsbury Set | [ Reply to This ]
  i love reading about the coming autumn and the falling/dancing of the leaves! this was sweet. at first, i thought you were possibly seeing faeries... then again, these leaves are like little faeries dancing in the wind and playing tag with each other. autumn is my favorite season, and this has me excited with the anticipation! thanks!
| Posted on 2004-07-20 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]


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