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    dots Submission Name: ninja starsdots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsninja starsdots
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    ninja scarves
    to cover up ninja scars
    and as im staring at ninja stars
    i see this all has gone too far
    now the tar
    dries hard
    and here i am barred
    in your world
    a prisoner with hate hurled
    in my direction
    at almost every intersection
    this is my disection
    of what i see
    as i ninja past invisibly
    to sit in my majical staircase
    with this sight i cant erase
    and i spy
    with ninja eyes
    this tiny little ninja guy
    and im so high
    and i jump and i fly
    and i realize
    when i start to fall ill die
    and i cry
    for stolen ninja lives
    and failing ninja tries




    Submitted on 2009-09-16 21:31:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hey long time i dont no what to say about this one
    good effort

    sandman
    | Posted on 2009-09-18 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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