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Falling Faster

Author: Krinchinian
ASL Info:    20/f/pa
Elite Ratio:    3.12 - 164 /231 /84
Words: 72
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Falling Faster

Falling faster
not knowing when I'll stop
can't control these feelings
why do we fall in love?
falling means we'll get hurt
so does tru love really exist?
or are we caught up in ideas
of our fairy tale ending
but prince charming turns
out to be truly fictional
still we long for love
we went to feel safe
and to be wanted
so I keep falling faster
hoping to be caught

Submitted on 2009-09-17 15:46:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  much like the subject that I write about for prince charming. One critique is some spelling errors like true, and where it says went I read it as want.
To fall in love is completely terrifying but it's like roller coaster of emotion, in a way not knowing if you are going to crash or not.
| Posted on 2009-09-21 00:00:00 | by caelyn rose | [ Reply to This ]
  I completely relate...flounder back and forth between why in the world I want what I want when I know that you typically get hurt at the bottom of the fall... great job.
| Posted on 2009-09-18 00:00:00 | by Lynda | [ Reply to This ]

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