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    dots Submission Name: Fine Line Stringdots
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    Author: silverpen
    ASL Info:    16/F/Right Behind You
    Elite Ratio:    3.47 - 16/34/31
    Words: 273
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 60
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1588



    Description:
       I just wanted to write something.
    I didn't check for structure,
    And barely bothered to rhyme.
    It is a vent poem.
    I hope you enjoy it,
    And perhaps can make some sense out of it.
    xD I couldn't find any.


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    dotsFine Line Stringdots
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    It is captured like a wisp of hair
    In the strands of a silken web.
    Built beneath so many truths,
    Is this one single lie that a man
    May begin to believe the more he tells it.
    One word, one promise, one broken faith
    Is all it takes. We lie.
    We will balance the both until we die;
    It is human nature,
    And how could we not be human
    If we did not do these wicked deeds?
    We all have our evil needs.

    One man can give a simple lie,
    White like the web it is hung within.
    He does not notice as it begins to spin.
    So many things can become built,
    Balanced upon a single thing,
    Like a heart built upon a string.
    He can no longer take away the lie,
    Or everything will fall.
    It is the support beam for all,
    And that is how every life will work.

    Curse our ability to be human,
    For we feel the best and we feel the worst,
    And half of each emotion
    Will come because of false words.
    Are we promised to go to hell
    Or threatened to have heaven?
    These are the questions we must ask,
    We must lie about,
    A man must console himself with guesses
    And lies. He can fight ‘till he dies.
    What is it to be in this world?

    As the spider hangs from her thread
    And sees the masterpiece before her,
    And the strand of hair is ripped loose.
    The web falls apart,
    Can it break her heart?
    She is just a spider, and will begin again.




    Submitted on 2009-09-17 22:02:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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