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    dots Submission Name: Fearless Souldots
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    Author: JoelIsHere
    ASL Info:    21/ Male/ Indiana
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 8/27/28
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 780
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 484



    Description:
       This is a Continuation of Our Sleepless Halloween- In which the Soldier is about to enter a battle against the world, alone.


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    dotsFearless Souldots
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    Setting down his Notebook,
    With the letter to his Wife,
    The soldier glanced to the sparkling lake,
    Reflecting the Stars and Moon.

    As the zephyrs blew,
    The soldier wept,
    A single tear,
    For the days he was away.

    His Sleepless Halloween, now over and done,
    Has left him bearing an empty smile,
    A Barren mind,
    And a Violent fist-
    His fearless soul soon facing his last Respite.




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      Before even reading it, I see that you are a craftsman for poetry, since you are working with a story and a fictional character and a metaphor. It's a more laborious path to self-expression than most of these people are walking, as they try to directly express their feelings or recount their lives.

    After reading it: people your age don't usually make poetry as mature as this. Please be encouraged and write incredible reams of poetry all your life without stopping! Or not.
    Anyway, thanks for posting your verse hereabouts so that I could meet you.

    I don't do games at all; but in some virtual world, are you a poet again? Is this bit of the Net just a little part of your game? (Because I was trying to guess or deduce the undermeaning of the scenes you describe in prose).
    | Posted on 2009-12-07 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
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    JoelIsHere has posted 21 writings, 4 forum posts, and 24268 Role Plays.

    JoelIsHere most commonly posts Passion themed writings.



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    Username: JoelIsHere

    Professorís Name: Professor Nightmare

    Account Age: Just over a year. Original? Just over 3.

    Real Age*: 17

    Preferred class: ES History


    What skills do you think you have that qualify for this job?
    My skills are nearly endless. If I lack one, I generate it.


    Any previous experiences that you think relate to this job?
    Many that I'd rather not talk about.

    Why do you think you should get this job?
    Beats me, that's irrelevant to whether or not I actually do.


    How often are you on Elite Skills?
    Often enough.


    Why do you want this job?
    ... Because I can't tell you no. Never could.


    Whatís your greatest strength (in relation to ES)?
    I protect those I care for, and often even those I don't.


    Whatís your greatest weakness (in relation to ES)?
    I'd rather not tell, sorry Sis.


    Are you willing to work with the Dream team for the good of ES?: What good would a Dream Team be without both halves of the Siblings of Dreams.


    References*: The Dean of Dreams herself


    Any other information you wish to share?


    Sample of your work:
    "So, I too was mistaken in believing that the Fallen Guardian Erebus had escaped death. Adeela does not have the authority to accept that treaty-however temporary on behalf of the Knights of the Storm, Vacil, and you know it. This goes through me first. Adeela, by order of the Lord Captain Commander, you are charged to ready our men for an assault, most likely in the Scar of the Plains. Also, I need a word with this Evo' Vate alone. He and I have some unfinished business to attend to."


    "So, Vacil Nethershadow," Eldor asked, sheathing the Blade of Kinslayer and the Lightblade, "Why did you choose the Storms to clear your path? Why not ask the Three Supremes? Wait, I already know the answer to that- The only one that can truly be called a Supreme Guardian is Belivantha. Spirit is gone, and most likely either in a drunken stupor, or six feet under, and Areanna? The essence only knows where she has fled to after the Catastrophe of Erebus. You would not dare go to the Soldiers, as now that Orion has died on my blade, they have begun accepting any warrior that can wield a weapon, including Demonic Assassins. The Land has been subjugated by corruption, the only lands free are those immediately around the Holy Mountains of Lightblade and Fallen."


    "Well, now that I am done answering my own question... Lets move on to the subject of the Demonic Lords that have made Base in the area around the scar. Of my uncles- Ragnarith, Armaldine, and Catastroph, Only one has the power to call himself a veritable threat to my army- The last, Catastroph. Armaldine, he is a foolhardy coward, that has twice fled upon a rumor stated my his men that I was coming for his head, the Blade of Kinslayer in hand. Though his army is the Largest, it will fall faster than either of the other two."


    "Next is Ragnarith. His is the tie that binds D'Hamion and I together as distant cousins. He goes into a sort of Feral state during battle that I often did whils't corrupted. With an army full of berserkers, casualties are the only thing that will stop him. Fortunately, their tolerance to Magic is exceptionally low."


    "Finally, we have Catastroph. His army is Filled with the Blademasters that had left the Temple, as well as very powerful Necromancers and Black Knights. We'll need the Time Mage's help- If we can get it- to take him down. His is the Advance force of the Demonic King Himself, so they are warriors who have been Battle Tempered to an extreme. You have the aide of the Knights and the Tempest Vanguard, Nethershadow- do not betray what trust I have for you."


    And lastly, and most importantly, have you ever killed any students? Yes. The unruly brat was sabotaging my teaching, and I sliced him up and fed him to Dave.


    Thanks me. I need to keep that.
    | Posted on 2009-11-09 00:00:00 | by JoelIsHere | [ Reply to This ]


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