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    dots Submission Name: An everlocked peculiar stancedots
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    Author: vLame
    ASL Info:    21/m/lbc
    Elite Ratio:    1.61 - 15/18/50
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 34
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    Bytes: 996



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    dotsAn everlocked peculiar stancedots
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    the day i doubt my mind in it's art
    will be the moment my heart's sorrow starts
    because it is wrong to unsee what i believe
    i might as well put my heart under a cleave
    with the force i pull myself away with
    the muscle will split, remembered as a myth
    so i give it to ye untemporal
    for it would never be up for transferral
    hold my hands as our souls dance
    entered in an everlocked peculiar stance
    not quite percieveable by others
    yet not doubtable by another's
    shant it fade for memories currently made
    will spark a remeberance once again lovingly displayed
    together we open a door
    grasp this knob with my amour
    i beg my love dont be scared
    let no wandered truth be spared
    with each other in this cordial epoch
    we'll each within each other be in a lovelock
    hold it, keep it, treasure it with force
    for i will do the same to yours




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