Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • ES Magazine
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • Video Tutorials
  • RolePlay
  • 90% off Amazon
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Midnight Loverdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Max Million
    ASL Info:    17/M/DRA
    Elite Ratio:    2.61 - 34/63/78
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 60
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1032



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsMidnight Loverdots
    -------------------------------------------


    In the dead of night
    I push back the brush to see my midnight lover
    Beneath the stars I whisper "I love you"
    You smile and, in an instant, it's all gone
    Memories of loves past, wounds from the Winter
    The one that Pierced my heart, the olive skinned Adonis
    The Prince, The manipulator, all dwarfed and erased by My midnight lover

    Years of torture, decades of torment
    Centuries of pain, millennia of loneliness
    All wiped away by you
    All I have now is your smile, your words
    It seems that I wait for you forever
    Only to hold you for an instant
    An instant of bliss and ecstasy, a present from
    My midnight lover

    But as the sun rises
    And the dawn breaks
    We must part
    You to your duty, and me to my slumber
    But in due time, as the sun sets behind the horizon
    As sure as the seasons, or as sure as time of day
    I shall return, and embrace
    My midnight lover




    Submitted on 2009-09-19 14:22:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      This is beautifully written. Such imagery, it set a verra picturess scene. Kudos!
    ~BeautifullyCorrupt
    | Posted on 2009-09-25 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    178637



    Full Anime Episodes Streaming Free
    5 million youtube videos all rated over 4.7 stars with 40+ ratings

    [ Copy this | Start New | Full Size ]

    Google
     

    [ Chrispian ] [ Write Forum ]
    [ Friends ] [ SNESroms ] .
    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry