your reference to "something poetic" in line 14 and so forth is really something, i thought your ending to this poem was very intriguing. the description earlier on, however, confuses me, where you refer to "he" not being of "vanity" yet "grasping anything temporary". this is great writing, but, in my attempts to relate, i get caught up at this point. if you wouldn't mind, could you explain? again, thought this was very interesting to read.