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    dots Submission Name: Again OR Is my desire really so much to askdots
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    Author: vLame
    ASL Info:    21/m/lbc
    Elite Ratio:    1.61 - 15/18/50
    Words: 297
    Class/Type: Prose/Depressed
    Total Views: 59
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1736



    Description:
       guys have feelings too, think about that next time, before you break a man's heart in two.

    the majority of the poem was about a girl named liz who was a liar and just wanted me as arm candy, drina was the next girl i dated who i really liked but had a hard time developing feelings for because my heart was broken by liz.


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    dotsAgain OR Is my desire really so much to askdots
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    there is nothing pretty about you
    yet there is something i was fooled into seeing
    how did you play so tactfully
    yet not fall for your own game
    was i but a practice round
    to see if you could prevent it perfectly sound
    maybe if i could see you again id fulfill my vendetta
    i'm sure you didn't deserve what i gave you to no end
    i may lurk, but it's not for you
    it's for another, a real sweet soul
    not your's of rabid hunger for looks and self glam
    i gave you all you wanted yet i never had you
    you ruined me, then, now and eternally
    i want my fucking heart back, you cunt
    you never fucking wanted it, you bitch
    it was just a fucking chew toy to you
    and all along i kept coming back
    i guess i loved the ride, perhaps
    but the waste on my heart wasn't worth it
    "maybe im just like my mother, im never satisfied"
    i think in some warped fucking sense i like being treated like shit
    i was told before we met, you had given a bad vibe
    i should have trusted him and not your facade
    an exclamation of your name is always on the tip of my tounge
    as to scream that when something, if ever wrong you were the cause
    now something is wrong, it's not yours, give it the fuck back!
    now without your devilish soul i want true love
    and i can't for my heart is seeing locales encore
    it drives me insane, perhaps it all has been a test?
    to see if i deserve my one true love
    the one you materialized your horns antecedent to
    i just want to fucking say, Drina, i've fallen in love with you




    Submitted on 2009-09-21 06:39:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ROFLMAO!!!!!!!!!!!
    I'm sorry :)

    Well, I love it simply because it's straight angry real and you're funny.

    i want my [censored] heart back, you cunt
    you never [censored] wanted it, you [censored]
    it was just a [censored] chew toy to you

    The ending line? You'd go BACK to her? ROFLMAO!!!!!!!!!! That's the funniest part. No, it's not a test. Drina is a fvcking b1tch. Fact is stranger than fiction.
    | Posted on 2009-11-15 00:00:00 | by stonewashblues | [ Reply to This ]


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