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    dots Submission Name: The Frostbitten Souldots

    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 173
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 568
    Average Vote:    4.5000
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       the first stanza was originally meant to be the only. i dded the second later. I wuz debating myself... should it be The Lost Snow Angel and The Frostbitten Soul?.... idk... but anyhow, enjoy... iretyped this from memory, mite have to edit it a little later, but this is it...

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    dotsThe Frostbitten Souldots

    She’s an angel…

    who’s forgotten she has wings
    but I can’t help her remember
    down to earth, like the snow
    in the winter, December
    and there’s nothing I can say
    in cold gasps of air
    as my lungs thick with it’s pressure
    now collapse and bear
    my soul, exposé
    more as if it was written
    for if she is the frost
    then I have been bitten
    and with it, the story
    the coldest ever told
    of the lost snow angel
    and the frostbitten soul…

    llike so many times before
    I remind her
    who she is to me, truly
    if only she could find her
    wings… they’re right there
    attached to her back
    I just pray she doesn’t fall
    and not find them after the fact
    or that it never gets that far
    or gets that hard
    I just want it as in my memory
    if that’s par
    and in the shard is the story
    the coldest ever told
    of the lost snow angel
    and the frostbitten soul….

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      NICE i like this one especially the way it's being told VERY gripping :) I like the last few stanza's the most
    I just want it as in my memory
    if that’s par
    and in the shard is the story
    the coldest ever told
    of the lost snow angel
    and the frostbitten soul….
    VERY creative nice job keep it up :)
    peace & stay safe...
    | Posted on 2010-01-27 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a marvles peice, I like the title it’s very fitting and the analogy of a lost angel who’s lost her wing not knowing there still on her back. I know how it is when someone is in slumber lost searching for what they already have and you could help them or show them if only they listen. I also injoy the comparesin of winter, it seems when the heart is cold winter always feels like home. Again this was a splendid piece keep up the work.

    | Posted on 2009-09-23 00:00:00 | by faideddarkness | [ Reply to This ]

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