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The Frostbitten Soul


Author: AeThe Lost Poet
ASL Info:    19/M/DE
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Words: 173
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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the first stanza was originally meant to be the only. i dded the second later. I wuz debating myself... should it be The Lost Snow Angel and The Frostbitten Soul?.... idk... but anyhow, enjoy... iretyped this from memory, mite have to edit it a little later, but this is it...


The Frostbitten Soul



She’s an angel…

who’s forgotten she has wings
but I can’t help her remember
down to earth, like the snow
in the winter, December
and there’s nothing I can say
in cold gasps of air
as my lungs thick with it’s pressure
now collapse and bear
my soul, exposé
more as if it was written
for if she is the frost
then I have been bitten
and with it, the story
the coldest ever told
of the lost snow angel
and the frostbitten soul…

llike so many times before
I remind her
who she is to me, truly
if only she could find her
wings… they’re right there
attached to her back
I just pray she doesn’t fall
and not find them after the fact
or that it never gets that far
or gets that hard
I just want it as in my memory
if that’s par
and in the shard is the story
the coldest ever told
of the lost snow angel
and the frostbitten soul….




Submitted on 2009-09-21 09:40:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  NICE i like this one especially the way it's being told VERY gripping :) I like the last few stanza's the most
I just want it as in my memory
if that’s par
and in the shard is the story
the coldest ever told
of the lost snow angel
and the frostbitten soul….
VERY creative nice job keep it up :)
peace & stay safe...
| Posted on 2010-01-27 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]
  This was a marvles peice, I like the title it’s very fitting and the analogy of a lost angel who’s lost her wing not knowing there still on her back. I know how it is when someone is in slumber lost searching for what they already have and you could help them or show them if only they listen. I also injoy the comparesin of winter, it seems when the heart is cold winter always feels like home. Again this was a splendid piece keep up the work.

Faid
| Posted on 2009-09-23 00:00:00 | by faideddarkness | [ Reply to This ]


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