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Ultimate Goal

Author: Old
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Ultimate Goal

Bigger fish to fry
dropped in boiling oil alive.
Insects coming from their hive
devouring flesh as it dies.

Cultures blood the Legions taste
inventing a brand new silence.
Hammer to skull, lay to waste
pounding out deserved violence.

Like grass, we choke down your soul
spreading vast until I'm the whole.
Chopping and crushing one at a time,
but the universe is the ultimate goal

Submitted on 2009-09-21 14:58:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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