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    dots Submission Name: third datedots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 614
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    Bytes: 673



    Description:
       to you my love third times a charm


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    dotsthird datedots
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    i dont know how it happened
    but somehow i missed you twice
    now were on number three
    and youre not being too nice
    but thats ok im bossy
    i know just what i want
    you just give me one time
    to tell you that youre caught
    cuz if were really gettin married
    and you really are all mine
    thats just what i expect
    every single time
    and you know im gonna ask you
    cuz im not your fuckin bitch
    i swear ill ask permission
    i swear you wont get ditched
    but this is sick and twisted
    and if you know what i mean
    im really fucking sorry
    but this is a dead scene




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