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    dots Submission Name: artificially sweetened limedots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 386
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
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    dotsartificially sweetened limedots
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    i know this is wrong i know i cant do this but i love him and he loves me and i need him and he needs stability and he sees me when im falling and he catches me and im safe again and nothing can harm me and im dying im not lying this time i swear its true im dying but at the same time im flying im free and im lost in his eyes and im not trying to hide and im not looking behind im alive and hes right on time everytime artificially sweetened lime this love is my deepest crime but ill be fine i swear im fine i swear im sorry i swear i love you i know you have no clue who you are but youre mine and were gonna be fine hes so blind hes so lost and gone and roaming all alone and i know i am his home i am his goal he is my tool and im his doll and well dress up and have a ball and im ready to fall and its too late ive fallen and hes callin and im comin and im runnin and ill be there and i swear this has to be whats fair cuz weve all had our chance at these trippin ass pants and i still wear them until he dresses me up in those tiny little skirts and those tiny little shirts and i swear this wont hurt not again never again its forever i have faith hes forever and we will never be tender just raw just hardcore already forwarned and im looking forward to being with him from a world that used to be dim from a world where i can see again and its beautiful and hes gorge-ful and so adorable and the rest of the world has to be jealous by now of what ive found they have to be happy at least that i am found and no longer lost only waiting only the beginning is over and this will never end this is theonei wont send away not today not tomorrow not ever and only when the time is right will we begin to fight but he already knows that its over before we start over and i will be sober




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