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Dearest Friend


Author: Ontlogicalamity
ASL Info:    33/M/NY
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Words: 113
Class/Type: Poetry /Friendship
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This was written a long time ago. A loooong long time ago actually. I must have been reading something at the time, because I tend to use more natural language. But it was to a very very dear friend whom I was getting fed up with at the time, as were others, and I had to come up with a ..tactful way of telling him. So, this was my best shot and I think it came out halfway decent.


Dearest Friend




Dearest friend, thou hast wronged us.
Thy comrades grimace at your entry.
'Tis not through bad intentions, mind,
But lack of good ones, certainly.

For would it not be beneficial,
To allow thy friends their illusions,
To let them think they're right, though wrong,
And thy comments within kept all?

Does each one of us need to know
Exactly why you had a thought,
And how loudly you play the music,
And just how deep thy love can go?

A thought may be expressed with just one sentence.
Despite the chance of misinterpretation,
Thy friends will see the good in you come through,
And the wisdom of your silence.




Submitted on 2004-07-20 10:31:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Well, it's different from any poems I've read that were recently written. Even though it's unrhymed, the rythmn of the poem was clear and nicely done. And, err, i think your friend got the message ^.^;;
Aken Sol
| Posted on 2004-08-14 00:00:00 | by Aken Sol | [ Reply to This ]
  Dude knowing this is about me, I hate it and I will say why, I dont remember the reason behind this.!
"Dearest friend, thou hast wronged us.
Thy comrades grimace at your entry.
'Tis not through bad intentions, mind,
But lack of good ones, certainly"

to have something like that written about myself, it is a pain stabbing within, because now I look back on who I was and already having done so with disgust it pains me to think that there was a time in which this was needed. On the other hand it is very well written, though sometimes I feel you talk in older speach to much. but I guess somehow it fits knowing u as well as I do. Now for everyone else who reads this comment please dont take this as an attac on Aaron for he is my oldest of friends and I appreaciate that he did this for me, the resentment I have for this poem is directed at myself.
| Posted on 2004-07-20 00:00:00 | by Mithrandir | [ Reply to This ]
  I should have been a bit more explicit. The language in this piece is NOT natural. I said I must have been reading something at the time because I tend to use more natural language in MY OTHER work. Sorry for the misunderstanding.
| Posted on 2004-07-20 00:00:00 | by Ontlogicalamity | [ Reply to This ]
  I think that the simple language used was quite affective in which you have written it. It is intelligently formed and has a pleasent flow/rhythm that is just wonderful. I enjoyed this poem that was written a long time ago, I am anxious to read more from you, to see the progression. Welcome to Elite. :)
| Posted on 2004-07-20 00:00:00 | by Belle De Jour | [ Reply to This ]


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