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    Author: PiperH
    ASL Info:    17, F, Georgia
    Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 253/299/172
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    I can't go in there
    and relive the day
    when I said goodbye
    when I gave you away
    to vast darkness
    that circled your head
    the night before
    as you went to bed
    I can't go in there
    and look at the seat
    where i sat crying
    looking down at my feet
    as the pastor prayed
    and memories were told
    I watched your life
    Like paper, unfold
    I can't go in there
    and bring up the past
    there's too much dust
    my lungs would collapse









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