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    dots Submission Name: Ignorance is Blissdots
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    Author: Jessa
    ASL Info:    29/f/pa
    Elite Ratio:    3.73 - 221/209/73
    Words: 203
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 611
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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       Fibromyalgia sucks and so does our government


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    dotsIgnorance is Blissdots
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    Fatigue settles in from my head to my toes
    I don't offer many smiles on days like these
    For the gloom in the air that tickles my nose
    Renders me useless to even say"please"

    Nothing quite like the smell of defeat
    This body and I don't seem to fit
    The weather, alone calls for retreat
    Another day started, one more to quit

    Fear of the future that haunts day by day
    What's in store for someone like me
    Another bill in the mail, begging for pay
    If only they saw the things that I see

    "Handi-capped" whispers through medical files
    Our system seems to read only in bold
    As the government screams my denial
    The blood in my veins drips only cold

    Tears flood the streets below our beautiful steeples
    We'll feed, clothe, and medicate for new lives to begin
    Foreigners welcome, we don't have enough people
    Please don't trip on our veterans as you let yourselves in

    Another year to go before my lawyer gets my day
    Come the first of the month my neighbors are all paid
    You can work all your life and sign it away
    For integrity will die while ignorance gets laid




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      Jessa,
    This poem flowed well. Again you had a couple one liners that took it from a nice poem to awesome! "For integrity will die while ignorance gets laid" That is a quote people can feel. Anyone one who has screwed up or been screwed over can feel something when they read that. I liked it a lot.
    Johnohhh
    | Posted on 2010-11-16 00:00:00 | by bigohhh1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Jessa, this is a very nice poem! As I read it I just felt so in tune with what the poem was written about. I felt I could connect. Although, still' after a few times reading it through, I don't fully understand what it's about, but I enjoyed reading it all the same. I was looking over my previous poems and I thank you again for all of your comments.

    ~Dreamer
    | Posted on 2010-01-03 00:00:00 | by Dreamer5009 | [ Reply to This ]


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