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    dots Submission Name: Lonely Stardots
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    Author: faideddarkness
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Idaho
    Elite Ratio:    6.53 - 101/55/51
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsLonely Stardots
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    This once shining star
    Now is growing cold
    All the walls going dark
    This feeling so old
    Felt the need to compel
    To make others come alive
    But now I just walk
    With no reason to survive

    The warmness I held
    Slowly dwindles away
    And the wind I breathe
    Seem to not want to stay
    This star held inside
    Turning into stone
    No longer glowing
    Sitting all alone




    Submitted on 2009-09-23 00:55:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Have you ever seen the watchmen? This reminds me of the character Dr. Manhatten. This poem has an alien feel to it. This person is an outcast just wishing to be held, if only for a little while.
    "To make others come alive."
    From this line, this also could be a religious poem.
    Very interesting and original.
    ~Rachelle
    | Posted on 2009-09-23 00:00:00 | by Priestess | [ Reply to This ]


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