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    dots Submission Name: zeusdots
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    Author: PopRocksRae
    ASL Info:    16 going on 17
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 174/201/192
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 66
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 961



    Description:
       "you're the kind of man a woman thinks she can change oh...but the only thing changing is my way of thinking"
    -a lesson is leaving-
    By: Jo Dee Messina


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    dotszeusdots
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    caught you when you tried to fly away
    your curiousity killed the cat
    you won't be in my way anymore
    and your lies won't hold me back.

    have you killed yourself for power
    or is it the glory you want?
    nothing meant nothing left to give away
    and nothing is what you got.

    you aren't a greek god.
    zeus get off your high cloud.
    you won't belong.
    and you'll only let us down.

    take your powertrip
    take it with you and jump off a cliff.
    how can you be so arrogant
    and make me so sick?

    i trusted in you which was my mistake.
    you had to have my all.
    i thought i could change you.
    but i always fell for your downfall.

    you aren't a greek god.
    zeus get off your high cloud.
    trust in something besides yourself
    cus you always let me down.




    Submitted on 2009-09-23 10:03:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Wow i sense anger in here definitely, aimed at someone called Zeus maybe? Or maybe thats just a metaphorof some kind. Anyway i feel you have anger in this but it is somewhat toned down as if you express your anger and yet you hold it back to show that you are not like the other person, you can be civil and controlled. This was good, shows a greater potential waiting to bloom.

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    -Svw
    | Posted on 2009-10-06 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]


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