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    dots Submission Name: A Fallen Angel: Vol I: 12dots
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    Author: Fallyn Angel
    ASL Info:    20/F/CT
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 44/66/84
    Words: 715
    Class/Type: Story/Being a Teen
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       The final chapter of book 1


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    dotsA Fallen Angel: Vol I: 12dots
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    A sound of twigs breaking could be heard from below. Fallyn peered over the edge to see what it was. It was a good thing that whoever it was didn't see her.

    "I gotta tell you something." the mystery man said to himself like he was practicing for something.

    After he had spoke, she knew exactly who it was. It was Justin. Now she had a confused look on her face. What was he doing? She decided to stay quiet and just watch.

    "Listen, I like you a lot." Justin said to air. "I've liked you for a while but I never had the nerve to tell you. I was afraid." he paused and took a breath.

    Fallyn was watching him intently. She was more intrigued to know who he had a crush on. So, she kept listening to his pretend conversation. Eventually he'd say who it was.

    "I'm even scared now. I just wanna know how you feel about me Fallyn." he finished and sighed. "Too bad she's not here to hear any of this." he told himself.

    Fallyn almost fell out of the tree house but she caught herself. Justin decided to leave now. Fallyn watched him in shock still. When he was out of sight, she let out a sigh.

    "Whoa!" she said to herself. "I never knew that he felt that way. I wish I could tell him I feel the same way but I just can't."

    Fallyn grabbed his guitar and strummed it once. Eventually she'd have to give the guitar to him. Which meant that she'd have to confront him sooner or later. Only thing was, could she do that? She wasn't sure if she could. This whole thing made her scared even more than before. Sort of like him.

    After a few minutes, she climbed down while holding the guitar. Tomorrow she would attempt to give him the guitar back. Hopefully she wouldn't be so scared. Let's hope she'd get the nerve to talk to him.

    All of a sudden she heard crying from behind her. It sounded like babies. Which it was. She had almost forgotten about them. The twin babies were up in the tree house. She climbed back up and grabbed them both. It was a good thing they weren't crying when Justin was here. He would've heard them and knew someone was there.

    Fallyn walked how now. Each hand had a baby in it. The guitar was around her torso on its strap. All she wanted was to go home and sleep. That may not happen since she had the twin baby dolls from Family Life for at least a week or less.

    School had already started and already there was so much drama. First David, Then Jude and Paulo, and now Justin. Did every guy like her or something? She couldn't believe it either. It was all so new to her. Boys usually made fun of her or tormented her. Why was it all changing?

    After a few minutes, she was out of the forest and the twins had stopped crying. When she was fully out, she noticed Justin's car was still there. As she walked up to the car, someone came up behind her and tickled her sides.

    Fallyn turned around giggling and saw that it was Justin. Her smile faded some.

    "You weren't in class." she said as she looked down.

    "I know. I had things to do. Sorry. What'd I miss?" he asked smiling at her.

    "Not much." she said.

    "Well what is it?" he asked her.

    "She handed out a packet to each couple and gave out the dolls. We got twins." she held them up for him to see.

    "That was today?" he asked her. "I'm so sorry."

    "It's alright. I gotta go though." she lied to him.

    "Wait! I left you a note in your locker, did you get it?" he asked her.

    "No, sorry. I'll check tomorrow." she lied again to him.

    After a few moments, she walked away holding the babies. This was the first time she had lied to her best friend. It was for the best though. Wasn't it?




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