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    dots Submission Name: under the great oak treedots

    Author: caelyn rose
    ASL Info:    19/F/Va
    Elite Ratio:    2.96 - 4/8/11
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsunder the great oak treedots

    I see people passing me by,
    under the shade of a great oak tree,
    acorns dropping all around me
    pitterpattering on the ground

    I wait in anxious hope
    under the great boughs swaying above me,
    that he will come
    framed by the sun,
    smile open and welcoming

    Then we would sit
    under the old tree
    and watch the people walk by,
    caught in their own little world
    like we are caught in ours.

    Submitted on 2009-09-24 16:11:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I myself have written a poem about sitting under a tree, I find that it is easier for me to write when I am out like that. Nicely written...
    | Posted on 2009-09-26 00:00:00 | by t0_eazy | [ Reply to This ]
      Hope and tender aspirations, and what better place to have them than under the great oak tree. The Oaks are a majestic tree, stout and proud, and sheltering to all beneath.

    I'm a country boy, and love poems about the out-of-doors and nature. This has a country, woodsy, fresh air feel to it, and was a delightful poem to read.

    Nice work!
    | Posted on 2009-09-25 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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