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    dots Submission Name: la la ladots

    Author: Mimicked
    ASL Info:    28, Male, Portland
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 10/0/15
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 533
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       I think most guys have been in a situation with a girl where they're not sure where they stand. Well, this is about that. Let me know what you think.

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    dotsla la ladots

    You're not the typical one I seek
    But you intrigue me
    I love to listen to you speak
    It's so lovely

    Immediate questions of what's to be?
    I detract and now it seems that that is me.
    Just a Deviance I am, your anomaly
    I too my own deviant, on this quest to be

    Your blushing laugh,
    and that awkward grin
    External smiles,
    or from within?

    Better now here in the know
    Then there before in the fold
    vacillating interest
    imbalanced bliss
    oscillated affection
    somehow remiss

    You're not the typical one I seek
    But you intrigue me
    like trying to grip a slope too steep
    w/o roots or leaves

    You're not the typical one I seek
    But you intrigue me
    I'm transfixed when our eyes meet
    off limits, the decree

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