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Untitled Boredom

Author: Kio
ASL Info:    1?/male/Ireland
Elite Ratio:    3.04 - 8 /27 /25
Words: 36
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Untitled Boredom

The circular perimeter
Bearing little resistance
To our determination
And perseverance.

The outer defence
Crumbling under the force
Of just one successful soldier
Rooting and making his home,
Merging with the enemy.

Submitted on 2009-09-25 16:12:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  What a wonderful

I think crumbling might be the wrong word in this context.

you'll need to birth a new title for sure.:)

cheers for this one,
| Posted on 2012-12-14 00:00:00 | by ponykeeper | [ Reply to This ]
  I get it. xDD
| Posted on 2009-11-13 00:00:00 | by MeowAyumu | [ Reply to This ]
  Hey, if you can't beat'em, join'em. Interesting read you have here.
| Posted on 2009-09-25 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]

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