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    dots Submission Name: A Meaningful Lifedots
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    Author: rsujith
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 67/25/9
    Words: 281
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    dotsA Meaningful Lifedots
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    Oh! What a coward he was
    Not to have done so before,
    Not to have faced it on the fore,
    Though he knew all that it was.
    But now, there he was, broken
    Both in mind and form,
    Prepared now by all norm,
    For now there is nothing to fear,
    Nor anything to lose as now, dear,
    He could sense all coming to a close.


    With bloodshot eyes, he now looked
    Into the vast emptiness that lay behind him,
    Into that void dim,
    Spread over quarter a century
    Of education trying to instill morals,
    Half of which he lost living up to his friend’s laurels,
    And of a cursing job not long kept,
    A life useless beyond doubt.
    A smile onto a face he failed to bring,
    Nor a song of victory to sing.


    But now nothing could be done,
    For he would not see another sun.
    To death now that he rode,
    His broken mind now wavered,
    Not to his parents who really cared,
    Not to his friends naïve
    Or to the flowers that would rest on his grave,
    Not to his beautiful lover,
    Or to the drunken driver
    Who sealed his fate moments ago,
    But to the dark abyss behind him.


    And as he looked at the crowd around,
    Playing deaf to the rising sound,
    With a feeble ‘no’ he shook his head,
    Just before he joined the dead,
    In an effort to drain
    The only good that struck his brain.


    But alas! It was not to be understood
    That only a good deed of kindness
    Or a milestone to look back upon
    Would satiate fully
    Towards a MEANINGFUL LIFE!!!!




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      This was very cool. Profound. And deep. Nicely written. No suggestions really. Something definitely to think about. So I'm going to think about it :)

    And thanks for your comment :)
    | Posted on 2011-07-26 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      To live a meaningful life is the ambition of all caring and sensible humans. But, it's amazing the barriers and obstacles that life throws in the way of the well meaning, and of the hazards that exist along the detours that one is forced to take around them.

    The finality of death awaits us all, some timely, a lot untimely, and all a final deterrent to "a meaningful life".

    Again, you have done brilliant and very profound work here!
    | Posted on 2010-08-11 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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