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    dots Submission Name: Still moving.dots
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    Author: Namlooc20
    ASL Info:    26/Male/Spokane, WA
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 359/327/107
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       Yeah, short. Simple. Straight to the point.


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    dotsStill moving.dots
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    To be honest I miss you,
    And I wish to kiss you,
    But we all know,
    that when it snows,
    I'll grow fond,
    in some other pond,
    For another girl,
    And make you hurl,
    But you've got him,
    so go for your swim,
    I'm just walking,
    silently talking,
    searching for my pond,
    so I may grow fond.




    Submitted on 2009-09-27 00:49:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I liked the last two lines, it made me think about the over all poem a lot more. It's like a fairy tail really.

    I really began to think about ponds and little shoots of fondness sprouting up out of them, I t was really cute, and it had a lot of truth to it, even thought we want something/someone now, we'll always find something/someone else in a later time to want to go after.

    this was a good read, keep writing

    istalkmurdoch

    | Posted on 2010-05-06 00:00:00 | by istalkmurdoch | [ Reply to This ]


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