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    dots Submission Name: Let's Playdots
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    Author: PrettyHeart
    ASL Info:    39
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 62/55/53
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsLet's Playdots
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    Fluttering again, aroused by you.
    It is wondrous how you do that.
    Your voice teasing me with words,
    More thoughts though, of someday.
    Asking me to come out and play.
    Making me think could I, maybe?
    Oh no, temptation awakes in me!
    Grasping my mind in a whirlwind.
    Your laugh itís spinning me around.
    Like youth we play around, once again.
    My mind says catch me if you can.
    Although my heart is pounding fast,
    Waiting for you to leap and hold me.
    I hide the best I can I can't be caught.
    You know we play our games well.
    Knowing it brings the life back to us.
    Inciting our younger days, desire to play.
    Catch me if you can, some other day!




    Submitted on 2009-09-27 22:54:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hey this was cool and uplifting
    very nice something that all older folks should not forget to do as it keeps us young

    great idea for a write
    sandman
    | Posted on 2009-09-28 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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