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    dots Submission Name: Pale Girlsdots
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    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 1066/1177/572
    Words: 245
    Class/Type: Misc/Dark
    Total Views: 36
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    dotsPale Girlsdots
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    Alee is where the witches
    Anoint themselves with myrrh,
    Warm aloes are they smoothing
    On pale limbs supple, soothing,
    They gem their throats with riches,
    Wan opals they prefer.
    Alee is where the witches
    Anoint themselves with myrrh.

    Their suitors in the valleys
    Grown brown with autumn’s cold,
    They wait in anxious leisure,
    For each their witch a treasure,
    The scent of aloes rallies
    Their hearts like finest gold.
    Their suitors in the valleys
    Grown brown with autumn’s cold.

    Then prancing down the hillside,
    Fay girls all in a row,
    In moonlight they are gleaming,
    The early stars seem dreaming,
    The air is on the chill side,
    Pale witches white as snow.
    Then prancing down the hillside,
    Fay girls all in a row.

    These girls all laughing gaily,
    In gowns of purest silk
    Their suitors are all beaming,
    Girls have no need of scheming,
    Their beauty that shines palely
    Is pure as whitest milk.
    These girls all laughing gaily,
    In gowns of purest silk.

    Their kisses like to arrows
    That make their suitors swoon,
    Embraces so enthralling,
    Sad suitors sinking, falling,
    All helpless as frail sparrows
    Below the titan moon.
    Their kisses like to arrows
    That make their suitors swoon.

    Alee is where the witches
    Anoint themselves with myrrh,
    Warm aloes are they smoothing
    On pale limbs supple, soothing,
    They gem their throats with riches,
    Wan opals they prefer.
    Alee is where the witches
    Anoint themselves with myrrh.





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      wow. I really like the repetitiveness of the first two lines in each stanza. The whole thing in general paints a picture and tells a story at the same time. You have a great talent!
    | Posted on 2009-09-28 00:00:00 | by Jessica Lynn | [ Reply to This ]


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