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    dots Submission Name: A World We Can Call Our Owndots
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    Author: XZylaFaith
    ASL Info:    19/F/CA
    Elite Ratio:    1.05 - 1/2/20
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 491
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    dotsA World We Can Call Our Owndots
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    Slowly let your body
    Sink into mine
    Slowly fall into a delicate trance
    That gives you a rush
    As I release a sigh

    Move to another place
    And one more time
    Feel the most breath-taking rush
    As we clash together
    More and more pleasure

    Fall down on me gently
    Glide your hands
    All over my body
    Feeling every heart beat
    Let yourself lose control

    Let your mind go wild
    Don't control your control your thoughts or actions
    Let your imagination takeover you
    Soon we'll both feel like
    We're in a whole new world

    A World We Can Call Our Own

    ~Brie~
    Monday, July 20, 2009




    Submitted on 2009-09-28 13:22:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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