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    dots Submission Name: Can't Stop Thinking About Youdots
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    Author: XZylaFaith
    ASL Info:    19/F/CA
    Elite Ratio:    1.05 - 1/2/20
    Words: 189
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsCan't Stop Thinking About Youdots
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    Lost in a state of trance
    So dazed
    Can't even see who's calling my name
    I can only tell by the voice
    That I know from heart

    And it's weird to say the least
    But when I first met you
    You took me by surprise
    I was truly mesmerized by you
    Now I'm paying the price

    It hurts so much
    Thinking about you is
    Really never enough
    I just wan to hold you
    In my arms all night long

    I can't stop crying
    Wanting you more than ever
    I really do and it's
    So very true
    I can't stop thinking about you

    As if I couldn't say it enough
    I want to be with you
    For the rest of my life
    If that's not meant to be
    Then what is?

    I'm lost in a state of trance
    So dazed
    Can't even see who's calling my name
    But I don't need see
    For I know it's my love

    Calling me

    I just want
    I want to be with you
    Til now and forever

    ~Brie~

    Tuesday, July 07, 2009




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