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    dots Submission Name: Crystal Blue Eyesdots
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    Author: XZylaFaith
    ASL Info:    19/F/CA
    Elite Ratio:    1.05 - 1/2/20
    Words: 242
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
    Total Views: 520
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    Bytes: 1503



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    dotsCrystal Blue Eyesdots
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    I see you over there
    Staring at me with this curious look on your face
    Smiling at me so seductively
    Licking your luscious glossy lips, I see
    I know you’re teasing me
    Taunting me so elegantly
    But why are you so focused on me?

    And now I see you start to walk toward me
    I don't know what to do
    Should I run or hide
    Should I just stay and let you tell me that
    Everything's gonna be alright
    You’re so close to me now

    I try not to make contact with your gorgeous, crystal blue eyes
    As I look up
    There you are
    So hot
    And you know it
    Damn, I say to myself
    I must be in a dream

    But I know I'm not
    Just when I'm about to day something
    You kiss me
    The feeling of your tongue
    Oh, it just made me want to collapse into you

    Suddenly, all these questions came to my mind...
    How did you know I wanted you?
    Did you know this the whole time?
    Why is it me that you want?
    What do you see in me?

    And now I'm lying down right next to you
    I look at you as you sleeping
    Wondering what you're dreaming about...
    I still can't believe this
    That I'm finally with you
    It's true
    I'm so happy now that I'm with you

    ~Brie~
    Friday, January 23, 2009




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