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    dots Submission Name: I Dream About The Daydots
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    Author: XZylaFaith
    ASL Info:    19/F/CA
    Elite Ratio:    1.05 - 1/2/20
    Words: 211
    Class/Type: Poetry/Society
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    dotsI Dream About The Daydots
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    No one knows
    What I see through my
    Deep inset blue eyes
    It only seems to be lye

    All the unimaginable
    Horrific cries
    That I hear
    When alone
    I wish I could save myself

    And I start to feel as though
    I've no place to let go
    All my feelings and emotions
    That I feel about her

    My emotions are kept inside
    Wrapped up and tangled within
    I imagine one day that I'll be free again
    From this cruel world
    That's not a haven

    I dream about the day
    When we the people can say
    "Who the hell cares if we're gay,
    We are all the same in each and everyway!"

    So let us pray
    To give us strength
    To let us live another day
    Defending ourselves from people
    Who all think it's a sin to be gay

    ~Brie~
    Tuesday, January 28, 2009








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