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    dots Submission Name: If Only I'd Told Somebodydots

    Author: XZylaFaith
    ASL Info:    19/F/CA
    Elite Ratio:    1.05 - 1/2/20
    Words: 299
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsIf Only I'd Told Somebodydots

    I remember hearing
    Children screaming
    When a boarding the train
    That is waiting
    For them

    I watch them
    From far away
    They can't see me
    But I can see them

    I hear them
    Calling out
    To their mothers
    Their sisters
    Their brothers
    To their fathers

    I feel their pain
    How could I not
    For I feel I should be ashamed
    I know where there going

    I know I should tell them
    But for some reason
    I just can't
    It's not for me to tell them that

    What if they don't believe me?
    How awkward that would be?

    And I look up
    They go off to their unknown fate
    They don't know what will be waiting them
    Only I for saw that

    I just wish I could've told somebody
    I witnessed it in the images in my head
    For I should know
    All those children will be dead

    Why would I just let this happen?
    For I think I've lost my mind
    I try not to feel guilty

    It was my premonition
    I knew it all along
    Those children would have been alive
    If only I'd told somebody
    That something is going to go wrong

    Monday, Jan. 26, 2009

    Submitted on 2009-09-28 13:45:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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