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    dots Submission Name: I'm Losing Outdots
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    Author: XZylaFaith
    ASL Info:    19/F/CA
    Elite Ratio:    1.05 - 1/2/20
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Trapped
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    dotsI'm Losing Outdots
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    Hearts beating
    So fast
    Can't stop breathing
    I feel like I'm running so fast
    That I just can't stop

    Trying to regain myself
    But I'm losing out
    Where my soul is very old
    Why do I feel like?
    I'm so new to everything?

    Can't relax
    Just trying
    To slow
    My breathing
    Before it's too late

    And I pass
    Never to be seen again

    ~Brie~
    Monday, July 20, 2009




    Submitted on 2009-09-28 13:46:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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