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    dots Submission Name: The Darkest Place (re-submitted)dots
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    Author: KindredSpirit
    ASL Info:    20, Male, Burlington Iowa
    Elite Ratio:    2.37 - 46/71/89
    Words: 200
    Class/Type: Poetry/Gothic
    Total Views: 34
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsThe Darkest Place (re-submitted)dots
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    There are flowers in the meadow
    Big ones, and small
    Of the darkest shadow
    Cracks the dawn of fall.

    Like painting a picture
    A dash of color.
    But faded in time
    Losing its valor.

    Even when bright
    The sun doesn't shine
    And flowers shed not light
    Nor a shadow of a line.

    But in the midst
    A dark castle looms
    Surrounded by mist
    And that of the deepest gloom.

    The piercing cries
    Of spirits passed
    Cover your eyes
    Only a second to last.

    Fearful of death
    Unable to stand
    To take in a breath
    A front a castle so grand.

    You can read the history
    Inside and out
    A past filled with fury
    You steady your mount.

    Ride closer you do
    Until its close upon
    And a shadow consumes you
    And your presence is gone.

    Locked inside
    Forever and a day
    Your spirit to confide
    And suffer a darker day.

    How dark and full of hate
    Could be such a place
    Only one which brings the fate
    Of death we shall face.

    For caught in the shadow
    An unbeatable race
    Your spirit trapped and hollow
    Even in the darkest place.




    Submitted on 2009-09-28 16:58:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow... very in depth.. really pulled me in to this poem, I really admire this work.
    | Posted on 2009-09-29 00:00:00 | by TJGirl | [ Reply to This ]


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