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Submission Name:
The Darkest Place (re-submitted)
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Author:
KindredSpirit
ASL Info:
20, Male, Burlington Iowa
Elite Ratio:
2.37 - 46/71/89
Words:
200
Class/Type:
Poetry/Gothic
Total Views:
34
Average Vote:
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The Darkest Place (re-submitted)
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There are flowers in the meadow
Big ones, and small
Of the darkest shadow
Cracks the dawn of fall.
Like painting a picture
A dash of color.
But faded in time
Losing its valor.
Even when bright
The sun doesn't shine
And flowers shed not light
Nor a shadow of a line.
But in the midst
A dark castle looms
Surrounded by mist
And that of the deepest gloom.
The piercing cries
Of spirits passed
Cover your eyes
Only a second to last.
Fearful of death
Unable to stand
To take in a breath
A front a castle so grand.
You can read the history
Inside and out
A past filled with fury
You steady your mount.
Ride closer you do
Until its close upon
And a shadow consumes you
And your presence is gone.
Locked inside
Forever and a day
Your spirit to confide
And suffer a darker day.
How dark and full of hate
Could be such a place
Only one which brings the fate
Of death we shall face.
For caught in the shadow
An unbeatable race
Your spirit trapped and hollow
Even in the darkest place.
Submitted on 2009-09-28 16:58:32
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Wow... very in depth.. really pulled me in to this poem, I really admire this work.
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