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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Prose/Serious
    Total Views: 589
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 818



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    How does he know these things?
    Ane by he I mean me of course because he was just fishing.

    He knows me. To an extent.
    And then out the window.

    Anywho.

    I am writing now to suggest that this is all for nothing.

    I like the wind on my face,

    (contemplates and chews on stick)

    Yes, that's certain.

    For him, nothing.
    And him and him and him and I try to stop, try telling them all to stop and you know what the result it?

    Me,
    lying on the ground
    looking up into the face of a broken nose and lips shredded between metal and a hard fist.

    Fighting for what?
    Pride.
    Ha.
    Fuckers.

    It hurts and that's all.




    Submitted on 2009-09-28 19:16:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This feels like a moment, taken after an intense conflict, capturing a woman on the verge of distain for said event and indifference. I like the read of it, especially at the end when the lines become short and abrupt, almost as if they are being spat out.
    | Posted on 2009-10-06 00:00:00 | by shortandre | [ Reply to This ]


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