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    dots Submission Name: miragedots
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    Author: springwaltz08
    Elite Ratio:    0.53 - 1/2/11
    Words: 193
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsmiragedots
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    The secrets of in a dream talk
    It will encounter and the field
    It buys a forgiveness percentage
    Sick your features inside greeting
    The close relatives tus it closes, position eye color
    The assistance which takes it is not
    It hides fishily and it holds and the promise I never knew, which gets sick

    The dream which will not be the water service which it will turn round
    It fades, position my memories
    Also the pain comes to be dull, it throws away and the heart which breaks
    Other my soul which throws away only is cool, the position lump of ash
    Wound a tear ha. which it kicks full

    The last moonlight which is not expression
    Quality in the vindications which pretend
    Trace it disappeared without
    Board width warm You’ll never know

    In the pain inside which is not end
    It leaves and position after being late, the sliced raw fish
    Meaning will disappear without and the flower of the love which will go

    So tell me.. tell me.. the reason why..
    How can you do this to me..
    You break my heart..
    And you make me cry..




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