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    dots Submission Name: Infamous Notorious (well received & all that)dots

    Author: jayisademon
    ASL Info:    22/M/SoILL
    Elite Ratio:    4.24 - 129/81/88
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsInfamous Notorious (well received & all that)dots

    I have to tell you honey,
    that I am notorious.
    I am infamous.
    I'm everything you will never be.

    I'll be wandering lessons,
    dog-eared pages in the footnotes
    of history.

    So, please, please, please,
    make a note of my missed shots,
    and almost made-its.

    Just a little artillery,
    it's all that I'm asking for,
    is just a little credit.

    Give me this at least,
    that I sputtered out
    something meaningful,
    or insightful.
    At least every once in a while.

    You can even dress me up,
    in children's lullabies
    and song and rhyme.

    You can spin me full-meter,
    and wash me over at quarter time.

    Just make sure these anecdotes,
    don't get lost in the fray.
    I'm not selling you these prayers,
    but I'm not openly giving them away.

    I'm overlooked and forgotten.
    I got just what i always wanted.

    Submitted on 2009-09-29 09:53:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This piece struck my attention straight from the beginning and held me until the end, which is great because towards the end of a piece that hasnt gripped me i usually find myself skimming and having to go back and reread, which is immensly annoying.

    I really liked the whole idea, then the little ideas, and then the last two lines put it all together and pounded out your meaning.

    im not sure why but it seemed ever piece i was drawn deeper into this piece, until the end where it seemed to slap me and release me into the world.

    And im not sure if what i just said makes sense at all, to anyone but me.

    This poem kind of has me spell bound at the moment. incredible.
    | Posted on 2009-10-09 00:00:00 | by dthforeverpain8 | [ Reply to This ]

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