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    dots Submission Name: hollywood undead- paradise lostdots
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    Author: cor
    ASL Info:    16/M/NY
    Elite Ratio:    2.28 - 28/24/30
    Words: 477
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 47
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2694



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    dotshollywood undead- paradise lostdots
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    So watch my chest heave
    as this last breath leaves me
    I am trying to be
    what you're dying to see

    I feel like "Fuck man,
    can't take this, anymore,
    this heart, break this."
    This is life that's so thankless,
    How could he just forsake us

    racist he makes us
    hate us he gave us
    nothing but no trust
    and I am so fucked up
    So let this gun bond us
    Let's hide by this lust
    and once we are just dust
    he'll know that he loved us

    LET IT ALL BURN!
    I will burn first.
    God I've tried, am I lost in your eyes

    Just let me burn, it's what I deserve
    God I've Lied, am I lost in your eyes

    So take me and make me
    weakened and save me.
    this hate that you gave me
    keeps saying the same thing;

    "to sing when you hurt
    and to sing when you cry
    to sing when you live
    and to sing when you die."

    and here at the end,
    at the end of the hurt
    all the pain ain't the same
    when it's your turn to burn.
    We're the heart for the heartless,
    the thoughts for the thoughtless,
    the lies for the honest,
    we're the Gods of the Godless!

    Let it all burn
    I will burn first
    God I've tried, am I lost in your eyes

    Just let me burn
    It's what I deserve
    God I've Lied, am I lost in your eyes

    So cry 3 tears for me,
    When it's all gone,
    sing me this song

    So cry 3 tears for me,
    When it's all gone,
    When it's all gone

    I can not stand
    who i am I'm this man
    with this blood on my hands
    in this blood I am damned
    so watch my wings burn
    as they burn in the fire
    I'll scatter the ashes
    now sing for the choir

    Let it all burn,
    I will burn first
    God I've tried, am I lost in your eyes

    Just let me burn
    it's what I deserve,
    God I've lied, am I lost in your eyes

    This hate that you gave me keeps saying
    Just let me burn,
    Just let me burn

    This hate that you gave me keeps saying
    Just let me burn,
    Just let me burn

    Burn
    now
    Burn

    Just let me burn
    now
    Burn

    BURN





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